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Jamal Takes Over
Author: dale10
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(Added on Feb 1, 2007)
(This month 68693 readers) (Total 83965 readers) |
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I was the only white guy at an inner city gym, the black boys there took over my life! |
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Average (?):  (6/10) |
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| Reviewer:
studmaster58
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Feb 25, 2011 |
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Needs more plot development...... (7/10)
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| Reviewer:
slaveneedledick
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Feb 3, 2007 |
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The story is too broken up. Some paragraphs end in the middle of a sentance and continue in the next. The author may want to proof it. The overall concept is not bad. (5/10)
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