ER works fine for me, if you want an abbreviation.
Well, when I was thinking about it, I did have her fished from the ocean. However, their first meeting seemed like a better start. I working on the introduction of the prince now.
ER works fine for me, if you want an abbreviation.
Well, when I was thinking about it, I did have her fished from the ocean. However, their first meeting seemed like a better start. I working on the introduction of the prince now.
OK, Its just that ER sounds so clinical, and Eury is sort of exotic and dangerous in a far eastern kind of way...
Slave market works for me and you are the writer so you can change the facts, as long as you keep everyone in character. Speaking of which, not to jump the gun, those characters are of course going to change over the course of the story. That is very obvious in the case of Bura, as she becomes less of a mystery but the other two will change as well, if the story is going to have any meaning. It's up to you to do that in a believable and compelling way that readers can follow and relate to. But that comes later.
As for Mr. Deans' comments yup Glancing would be better, and incognito could be saved by switching from ...making her visits to the market as incognito as possible. to a simpler ... making her visits to the market incognito .
I'll let you two arm wrestle over the cocked eyebrow.
yours
Mad & Lews
English does not borrow from other languages. English follows other languages into dark alleys, raps them over the head with a cudgel, then goes through their pockets for loose vocabulary and spare grammar.
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